Tuesday, June 17, 2008

What's Wrong With This Card? - Update Last (Thanks!)


I thought this would work, but I am not liking it much right now. What's wrong with it? Should I lose the tan patterned strip? Is it the wrong ribbon (the only one I had that was not red + white-white)? Should I not emboss the sentiment? Should I lose the glitter spots? Does it need some more off-white somewhere? WHAT?! Sigh ....

Thanks in advance...





Love the ideas, ladies! Keep 'em coming! I firmly believe in baby steps, and when possible I only like to change one thing at a time. First up is making the eagle pop a little more.


I really like the idea, though I do not think my execution is on the mark. I think I'll lose (or narrow) the tan strip next. I still believe it needs some more white ... somewhere .... maybe ... oooh, maybe some white glitter instead of red? I'll sleep on this and try again tomorrow. Thanks for the help!!!












Here we are again! I broke my own rules and changed two things: I added the white layer behind the blue and I changed the ribbon. I decided to leave the tan patterned paper since the ribbon was not so much of a contrast any more. I might go back and trim the white layer to match the blue scallops ...

I think it is MUCH better, and on its way to being an okay card. :-)

Do you think the sentiment is passable now? I was going to try either leaving it off entirely so the card could be used for any occasion, or maybe using my Cuttlebug Olivia alphabet to do the sentiment instead of stamping it. I may also lose the red glitter gunk and replace it with clear Stickles.

Thanks, as always, for the great feedback!

I've decided not to bore you with all the in-between steps that have happened since the previous post, and just show you this last version; and I think I like it.

I trimmed the bottom of the white layer, and I like it better. I tried to use the Olivia alphabet for the sentiment, but it was wider than the whole card, so I opted for what you see here. I also covered up the red glitter spots with clear glitter Stickles.

Thanks for all of your great suggestions! It really helped me see beyond the idea in my head and make it better. :-)

8 comments:

Denise ~ Paper Ponderings said...

I'm not really very good at critiquing others' work, but I'll tell you what I would do...I would lose the tan strip, as you suggested and layer ovals under the eagle. It's very cute and some bright, matching ovals might help that adorable image stand out more.

Joan B said...

I like Denise's idea. Popping up that eagle with its own mat sounds good. Right now it is fighting for attention with the sentiment. I'm wondering if a smaller sentiment in the lower right hand would balance it out more.

Flossie's Follies said...

Your eagle seems to be just floating on your card. I agree mat the eagle

Heather said...

Definitely looks better with the matted eagle. Honestly, I'm not crazy about the ribbon you chose. It could work- but just different ribbon- I would go bolder I think.

Pegg S said...

I like the idea of a different ribbon - too many patterns right now. Maybe a solid ribbon? If you wanted a touch of white, what about matting the blue background piece onto white and then onto the base?

Heather said...

The blue ribbon is a big improvement! The card looks better and better with each revision!

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Brenda said...

Love it!